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Post by Dabeagle on Mar 3, 2015 8:07:06 GMT -5
So it's still early, but now our guys are on a collision course. What do you think will happen if Sage finds Harlequin?
This story was originally called Project Warlord and was something I planned out with Dan Kirk many moons ago. However, for reasons lost to time, we never got past that stage. This story isn't anywhere near what Dan and I had planned. In fact, all that had remained was the name, and even that was swept away in the end.
Happy reading!
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Post by Lugnutz on Mar 3, 2015 9:09:38 GMT -5
They will meet, most defiantly. But it's not the meeting The Corporation planned on. I have my ideas, but I'll keep those to myself for now and see how this pans out.
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Post by ryanbartlett on Mar 3, 2015 14:47:31 GMT -5
I didn't like that name.
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Post by jamessavik on Mar 7, 2015 19:34:53 GMT -5
I'm loving this story so far.
In my story Operation Hammerhead, the corporations had been stopped from using soldiers who were genetically engineered and raised for combat.
The cream of the crop special troops created by MilTech were all twins. They were paired from birth to be partners on the battlefield. Their one true weakness was that if one got killed, it messed up the survivor so emotionally that he was combat ineffective for longer than the corporation wanted to wait.
Hundreds of these twins were captured in training (6-14) and were adopted out. They were smart, fit and very capable.
Some people with bad intentions got hold of about one hundred of them and raised them as soldiers.
That was my take on the Gene-gineered soldier. I didn't explore their view very much and I'm seeing that was a mistake.
I'm loving this and look forward to it every week Ryan.
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Post by ryanbartlett on Mar 8, 2015 14:32:58 GMT -5
Glad you're enjoying it James. Dave and I put this thing together fairly quick, it just seemed to flow. I love thee characters.
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Post by Lugnutz on Mar 8, 2015 14:46:13 GMT -5
I'm loving this story so far. In my story Operation Hammerhead, the corporations had been stopped from using soldiers who were genetically engineered and raised for combat. The cream of the crop special troops created by MilTech were all twins. They were paired from birth to be partners on the battlefield. Their one true weakness was that if one got killed, it messed up the survivor so emotionally that he was combat ineffective for longer than the corporation wanted to wait. Hundreds of these twins were captured in training (6-14) and were adopted out. They were smart, fit and very capable. Some people with bad intentions got hold of about one hundred of them and raised them as soldiers. That was my take on the Gene-gineered soldier. I didn't explore their view very much and I'm seeing that was a mistake. I'm loving this and look forward to it every week Ryan. Sounds like the Jamie story "The Scrolls Of Icaria" I should read that again. Liking the Toy Soldiers too.
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Post by PaulR5 on Mar 15, 2015 23:04:16 GMT -5
I have not read any story that I could call similar to this. Some have individual parts that remind me of things in this story, but not any one story has enough to call a story "similar."
Parts of Harlequin's speaking patters remind me of a four year old I once saw in a museum, whose behavior was far beyond his years. When his grandparents wanted to go into the gift shop they had to DRAG him (literally) into the shop area, while he was crying, "No! I want to keep learning in the Museum! I don't need anything in the gift shop!" Harlequin's speech to Cass reminded me of this from a more advanced point of view, in that Cass did not understand that learning and improved moral behavior might be his key to more and more freedom.
Good story. The only complaint I have up to now is that chapters 3, 4, and 5 were so short.
Gentlemen (Dave and Ryan), do you have any idea how many total chapters there till be?
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Post by ryanbartlett on Mar 16, 2015 1:37:25 GMT -5
If I remember right it breaks down to 15 total chapters.
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Post by Dabeagle on Mar 16, 2015 7:59:06 GMT -5
Yes, I think 15 is correct. However, there will be a double post on the 26th and the 29th as I will be traveling to Philadelphia Friday the 27th. Ryan and I discussed twice a week postings, and we may see how this goes for us.
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Post by PaulR5 on Mar 22, 2015 19:31:34 GMT -5
Well, I see an interesting situation set up at the end of chapter 6. What if it's the same officer who met Harlequin?
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Post by jamessavik on Apr 30, 2015 20:52:11 GMT -5
Chapter 12
I think Harley just messed up.
Leaving Cass and Sage together was an emotional decision.
His military thinking should have told him- we are stronger together than apart.
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Post by ryanbartlett on Apr 30, 2015 22:30:20 GMT -5
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Post by Lugnutz on Apr 10, 2017 8:33:47 GMT -5
Bumping this back up.
Things tend to happen when you get bad news. They needed a reason to fight once they had a taste of freedom. Is the story done or was The Director not lying about there being other camps?
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Post by Dabeagle on Apr 10, 2017 16:12:03 GMT -5
Bumping this back up. Things tend to happen when you get bad news. They needed a reason to fight once they had a taste of freedom. Is the story done or was The Director not lying about there being other camps? Ryan and I had a few ideas and had started a sequel, but it was only a few pages in.
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Post by Lugnutz on Sept 13, 2018 11:43:28 GMT -5
I'm thinking of the movie 'Soldier' with Kurt Russel.
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