|
|
Post by PaulR5 on Jul 11, 2016 20:00:35 GMT -5
What a story! Good work, Israfil, or should I say, good suspenseful layering of work? Now we want more!
The images at the beginning sucked me in quickly, combining architecture, dragon, and fiery circle. It was good to see Sasha with college friends who were not Kale and Chase, and not connected with Alec originally. And at the table introduction scene, shouldn't Logan's last name been Whitmore instead of Whittemore? It appears to be Whitmore elsewhere in the Sanitaria Springs stories.
Great work, Israfil. I look forward to more of the Ellesier saga.
|
|
|
|
Post by Lugnutz on Jul 11, 2016 21:47:27 GMT -5
I noticed the Whittemore too. Still doesn't detract from the story. Not everything is peas and carrots there.
|
|
|
|
Post by Israfil on Jul 12, 2016 10:01:46 GMT -5
My bad on the spelling there. I'm glad you enjoyed it  I've always liked Sasha and was happy to have the chance to explore his college friendships. |
|
|
|
Post by Lugnutz on Jul 25, 2016 11:34:47 GMT -5
Defiantly a two parter at least. You opened up a new can of worms with that last bit.
|
|
|
|
Post by Israfil on Jul 25, 2016 13:16:46 GMT -5
Indeed. Well, at least now you know why Richard and Geoff never say anything nice about their parents  |
|
|
|
Post by Dabeagle on Jul 25, 2016 15:07:51 GMT -5
Taken literally, Geoff and Richard are both murderers, then, and Jon is simply a victim of circumstances. Role models they aren't, for sure.
|
|
|
|
Post by Israfil on Jul 25, 2016 15:59:32 GMT -5
Taken literally, Geoff and Richard are both murderers, then, and Jon is simply a victim of circumstances. Role models they aren't, for sure. In their defense, the parents had it coming.... And they genuinely love Jon. In their own way. |
|
|
|
Post by Dabeagle on Jul 26, 2016 9:38:50 GMT -5
Taken literally, Geoff and Richard are both murderers, then, and Jon is simply a victim of circumstances. Role models they aren't, for sure. In their defense, the parents had it coming.... And they genuinely love Jon. In their own way. Apparently the way a virus loves it's host! lol |
|
|
|
Post by Israfil on Jul 26, 2016 10:09:01 GMT -5
It's a mix of parental and fraternal, with a dash of something else thrown in but I'll just work to finish "Always" and let that make my case for me However if readers are unsettled by them, well, I've done my job. Wait till their uncle shows up - he has good reason to hate them  . PS Not split hairs but technically Jon's living off them rather than the other way around haha. Also, the deed was done for his welfare too (at least in Richard's minds). |
|
I've always liked Sasha and was happy to have the chance to explore his college friendships. 
.