pedro
Young Hound
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Post by pedro on Jul 31, 2016 15:59:57 GMT -5
Welcome to town John Thanks for a great story, bringing us a missing piece from Reindeer, cameo appearances from the Binghampton (Facilitator) group and even a malevolent presence I had not expected to hear of again! www.dabeagle.com/stories/JohnInLex/Sanitaria/MotH.htmlDave- the link from the Sanataria Springs Page does not seem to work properly. I had to access via your forum link. |
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Post by Israfil on Jul 31, 2016 16:20:08 GMT -5
I've only just started it but Ty's father is already annoying me. I'm ready for the guy to shuffle off his mortal coil.
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Post by Dabeagle on Jul 31, 2016 17:09:30 GMT -5
Israfil - considering the kind of characters you like to right, that's saying something! And Pedro I just went and checked, but the code seems right and it loaded for me on Firefox. What are you using?
As I told JohnInLex, the ending is a real stroke of genius.
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Post by Israfil on Jul 31, 2016 17:23:35 GMT -5
Well, the intolerance and following may have struck a nerve haha. Maybe it will change but Grant hasn't elicited much sympathy yet - plus once someone tries to refer to the bible (as he did in the last story) to justify their attitudes, I'm more inclined to judge them...harshly. Hypocrisy, especially religious hypocrisy, irritates me no end. But I'm excited from what I've heard about this story so far - looking forward to getting back to it.
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Post by JohnInOhio on Jul 31, 2016 19:41:22 GMT -5
Thanks Pedro. Actually I've been here all along. The forum wouldn't allow me to use JohnInLex. Someone must have already had it on another forum. It seemed a shame to leave Ty & Eric hanging out there. Also, I began to think, what could have caused Grant to think like that. I've been working with Dave on the Wiki and I remembered your lovely character from The Tourist. I think it worked out well. Thanks for sharing him.  Israfil, Ty's father was annoying me, too. I had to try to figure out why he would be like that. He could have just been an ass, but I thought there was more too it. Remember, his wife was genuinely surprised at his attitude. I think Ty's insecurity can be traced back to that early scene in The Wounded Reindeer when he's a brand new freshman and his dad goes off about queers. John |
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Post by Israfil on Jul 31, 2016 20:09:29 GMT -5
Yeah, I like how you fleshed him out. Ty's ability to forgive was just really hard for me to get around. Perhaps because I forgive much much less easily >_>
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Post by PaulR5 on Jul 31, 2016 20:31:07 GMT -5
Excellent story, JohnInOhio/JohnInLex. It was great how you worked in Chris, Noel, and Leigh. I like Eric's father. He reminds me of Maggie's father.
Well written story, well plotted, fits in well with the other stories, and a great read!
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Post by JohnInOhio on Jul 31, 2016 20:38:08 GMT -5
I liked Ty from the beginning. His joy at seeing two boys kissing on his first day of high school. Then seeing how that was squelched by his father. There had to be a reason. Ty's mother, Joyce, was genuinely surprised at his reaction. Ty seemed to withdraw back into himself. I tried to think how that would play out over the coming years. Ty and his father seemed to have a good relationship as long as Grant was unaware of Ty's orientation. Ty, for his part, was afraid of the consequences of coming out. (With good reason!)
While I was working on the Wiki I kept coming back to that story. It nagged at me. It needed finishing, at the least. I originally saw it as two stories, but in the end it became one longer one. There was no good way to end the first part then transition into the second. I gave Dave the first part, but I wasn't really happy with it that way. Cynus didn't like the way the story seemed to just stop, either.
I'm glad you like it. I discovered something about writing. It's hard work. I've not done it since high school. I'm well into my dotage now. I'm beginning to think of a new story about the boys.
John
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Post by Dabeagle on Jul 31, 2016 21:28:44 GMT -5
Now that it's posted I can share that Ryan's original plan was for Grant to have been closeted and jealous that his son could be free to be himself but that his whole life he'd been closeted—at least by the end of it, that would be the root. I think this version works very well and I'm glad Ty and Eric aren't going to waste.
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Post by Israfil on Jul 31, 2016 22:28:48 GMT -5
So yeah. I stand corrected on Grant. Still not sure I'd completely forgive him in Tysons place but that might be cause I'm a horrible person haha. Well done on the story overall, John  Loved it - the ending felt like a hit to the chest. In a good way. |
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Loved it - the ending felt like a hit to the chest. In a good way.