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Post by paul on Apr 2, 2015 11:51:45 GMT -5
Bantering and badinage; I'm hooked.
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Post by Lugnutz on Apr 2, 2015 14:23:52 GMT -5
Working on it as we speak.
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Post by paul on Apr 9, 2015 12:58:51 GMT -5
I continue to like this a whole lot. It's top-quality Dabeagle.
I just want to point out the scene between Harrison and Sean outside Sean's apartment: in the exchange each one discovers something about himself, and about the other one, and about the relationship that's developing between them. Really masterfully done and from a narrative/dramatic angle, really engrossing. Well, the whole thing is engrossing.
Just one odd tech note: in the final section, beginning with "The last session was a tad of a blur." the text is formatted so that it displays as underlined, center-justified and a somewhat larger point size.
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Post by Dabeagle on Apr 9, 2015 23:39:38 GMT -5
Thanks for the heads up, Paul! When I use the dividers to show a break in the story - usually the first letters of the story title, or in this case just ~T~, it's surrounded by two tags. The <h3> tag defined in the .css tells the tag how it's supposed to look. The </h3> turns it off. I forgot to add in the '/' so the style of <h3> was being used for the rest of the file.
it's fixed, now.
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Post by hoskins on Apr 30, 2015 3:27:45 GMT -5
Ticking: Holy shit. I'm gonna have to read this again a time or two. Lots and lots to unpack in this, and there's a lot in chapter 5 . Thanks, dabeagle!
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Post by paul on Apr 30, 2015 15:00:32 GMT -5
I'm still enjoying this immensely. Great characterizations.
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Post by Dabeagle on Apr 30, 2015 16:13:24 GMT -5
Thank you, guys. It's not a long one, only 8 chapters, so you won't have to wait long to tear through it.
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Post by Lugnutz on Apr 30, 2015 16:19:16 GMT -5
Tear thru it? Bite your tongue.
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pedro
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Post by pedro on May 23, 2015 23:45:59 GMT -5
Thanks Dabeale for another great tale.
I thought the early chapters showed a certain darkness, but the last chapter was on a different level.
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Post by Lugnutz on May 24, 2015 7:14:41 GMT -5
Didn't see it coming, but it don't surprise me.
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Post by Steve T. on Jun 15, 2015 22:13:01 GMT -5
I've never read a story by DaBeagle that I didn't like! Like Lugnutz said above me, I didn't see it coming either. Thanks!
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Post by ricky on Aug 23, 2015 15:38:59 GMT -5
I just finished it again. Ya, I beta read it but they are so much better when you can read them non-stop. Another thing I love about Dabeagle's stories is that when you read nonstop there is no break in the bubble. You can remain in the fantasy of the story from beginning to end.
Loved it and ya, that twist at the end was really unexpected. The story is awesome.
Going to look for any stories I may have missed.
Well done.
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Post by Dabeagle on Aug 23, 2015 19:19:12 GMT -5
I thank you, kindly.
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