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Post by Dabeagle on Aug 25, 2015 19:13:00 GMT -5
This story has been going on over at Nifty for a while. Quite a while ago I gave some unasked for advice to the author. I have no idea if he was able to use any of it, but I do think the story improved. I'm sort of a sucker for guys liking that 'one' guy - the one that stands out above all others, to them. There are some ups and down in the storytelling but, in essence, you have a gay boy crushing on a straight boy. I don't know, yet, if everything is as it seems of it there are secrets that will present themselves - but as the chapters have moved on, I think the guy has hit a bit of a stride. It never hurts to encourage folks, too, if you like the story. How I Got Carter |
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Post by mike on Sept 30, 2016 23:21:48 GMT -5
I was just curious what advice you gave to the author? I just read the entire 20 chapters in one sitting and I completely agree that the story got noticeably better after the first few chapters. I wasn't expecting much from this story at first, but was very pleasantly surprised by how good it got!
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Post by Dabeagle on Sept 30, 2016 23:34:28 GMT -5
I'm not sure, it was a long time ago. I liked some of the story elements—like the spin the bottle thing was done well. I think I sent him his first chapter with marked up suggestions. I put things in parentheses and make notes that way for dialogue, things that don't quite make sense or that would work better a different way. I know that I apologized for sending him unasked for criticism, but if I recall he told me it was hard to hear, but he acquired an editor and a beta, which he's started thanking in later chapters.
I think I can be pretty brutal in critiques, but it's meant constructively. Some of our SS authors can attest to that :-)
I also told him that, when finished, if he'd like to clean it up I'd post it and he likes that idea. He has about 3-5 chapters to go, I think he said.
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